Assignment 4- Save This/ That: Critique and Development
Saturday, October 13, 2007
After I presented the poster in class, some of my coursemate gave me very valuable feedback.
First point was that the colour background was too distracting and takes the attention off the two paper dolls. At a glance, it was not obvious that the focal point of the poster was the dolls and not the table setting. Some suggestions were made, such as taking away the background totally or changing it to a greyscale picture.
A second point brought up was that the tape that was joining the two dolls was not obvious enough. The main focus of the poster was actually the tape 'forcing' the dolls to be together. Some suggested enlarging the taped part of the paperdolls together.
Besides these suggestions, Julian also said that the poster was not depicting the notion of love well enough. There was not much emphasis on the word 'love' besides the subtle difference in colour. He suggested adding a heart shape or two to bring in the symbolism of love to the poster.He also said that the poster might not be balanced as it only symbolise 'gay' relationships and not 'lesbian' relationship being broken up.
So, I have made changes generally according to the suggestions made in class. I removed the photograph background and generated a graphical background using Photoshop. Then, I desaturated the picture and used it as a background. The attention of the poster already zoomed in on the pictures of the dolls.
Then, I shaped the background in an heartshape. This shows how the two 'heterosexual' dolls are accepted in love, and the other two dolls was deprived of the right to love, by falling out of the heart shape setting. I also added another female doll to appeal to the lesbian audience. The word 'Love' is enlarged and separated from the rest of the slogan to bring out the explicit notion of love.
Here is the final poster after the changes I have made:
Posted bymadguitarist at 3:39 PM
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